Richard Nikolaus Graf Coudenove Kalergi and the Paneuropa Movement

Korean Minjok Leadership Academy

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Feb. 4th 2011
Dec. 14th 2010
Dec. 13th 2010
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Feb. 4th 2011 . Timeline . go to RSH's Log

(1) Title suggestion : A Utopian Concept Becoming Political Reality : Richard Nikolaus Graf Coudenove Kalergi and the Paneuropa Movement. You might want to include years (from ... to ...)
(2) my overall impression so far : When you came to me telling me that you are interested in Utopias, I suggested Coudenhove and the Paneurope Movement, but I also told you that you took on a monumental challenge. Most utopias are defined by one single book, such as Thomas More's Utopia. In case of the one you chose, Coudenhove-Kalergi is the defining person, but his publications (mostly in languages other than English) stretch over several decades, so his utopia undergoes changes, is fleeting, difficult to grasp.
Frankly speaking, I expected you to early on give up on this topic and take on something less difficult. You have proven not only stamina and the "can't read the language, but I try my best anyway" attitude. You also have established an excellent organization; I like what you wrote so far and can't wait to see the finished paper.
(3) It is a bit confusing that chapter titles are repeated : II.1 Beginnings of an Idea; IV. Beginnings of an idea.
When I posted your draft and got to II.1-II.4, I thought : a bit thin, only later realizing that more was to come, only not in II.1-II.4.
Better : II) Phases in the History of Coudenhove-Kalergi's Pan-European Movement; merge II.1-II.4 into II.
(4) Generally, Winston Churchill, Robert Schuman, Jean Monnet and Paul-Henri Spaak (This is debatable, I am not sure about who should be mentioned as being most credited for the establishment of the European Union)
Paul-Henri Spaak and others ... and there shoulod not be a problem.
However, I would rephrase : In English language publications, generally, Winston Churchill, ..., and others ...
This is due to a number of reasons. Coudenhove-Kalergi foresaw a United States of Europe in order to balance U.S. influence; therefore he does not necessarily make himself popular with U.S. readers. Most of his publications were written in languages other than English - this is why he is so overlooked, his influence so underrated.
(5) Misspellings (Musolini) disregarded, I can agree to everyt word you say. Your draft is as concise, focussed and supported as I hoped it would be.

Dec. 14th 2010 . Timeline . go to RSH's Log

did not know that he was a Mason.
on Arthur Salter see here,_1st_Baron_Salter;
looks okay to me

Dec. 13th 2010 . Introduction . go to RSH's Log

(1) Sort countries in alphabetical order
(2) Replace America by U.S.A., England by United Kingdom
(3) Double check Estonia : Michalakopoulos; name sounds Greek to me
(4) Under authors you list Heinrich Mann twice
(5) In general, in this list : if someone was prime mkinister or held another important office, give the dates in which he held that office
(6) Give a reference, from where you compiled these data

Dec. 13th 2010 . Introduction . go to RSH's Log

(1) note : give page number

Dec. 13th 2010 . go to RSH's Log

looks good.
As you comment, there is much more.
You deal with an issue which is recent and in process; thus compiling information is not as easy as with topics falling into concluded chapters of history.

Dec. 13th 2010 . go to RSH's Log

Looks very ambitious. How many volumes do you plan to write ?
But thoroughly organized. A few oversights :
(1) chapter II.3 is followed by II.2.1, II.2.2, II.2.3, II.2.5 and II.2.6
(2) VI. The Movement in Ruins: Hitlerí»s Seizure of Germany and the Great Depression (1930~1939) List Great Depression first, Hitler's Seizure of Power in Germany second

(3) VII. The European Congress in Exile and Gaining American Support (1929~1945)
I assume you want to say 1939-1945
(4) I assume above you omitted II.2.4 (II.3.4) which is Great Depression and Hitler's Seizure of Power in Germany, and II.2.3 (II.3.3) which is to be Working with Briand and Stresemann (1923-1929)